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Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

This feels like a breakup poem to me, even though you don't say so. Just a sense that high-speed adventures aren't enough to sustain this relationship. I like the way the little puppy is so protective and obviously favours you.

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you, Martin. I like to think that the pup favored me!

I do miss LA.

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Gary L Taylor's avatar

I really liked that. You could feel the adrenaline and sense of danger, before the looking back and reminiscing on that feeling and past adventures.

Wonderful stuff.

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you very much!

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RJ Sykes's avatar

It's good when we can look back on these adventures and be thankful we were ok :)

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Lydia Fox's avatar

This was written so beautifully 🙏

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you, Lydia.

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🏳️‍⚧️ SAVING THE GWORLS 🏳️‍⚧️'s avatar

Beautiful poem 💞

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you very much.

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🏳️‍⚧️ SAVING THE GWORLS 🏳️‍⚧️'s avatar

Keep the connection with me and subscribe 🫂

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Beth L. Gainer's avatar

Wow, Patty! The last stanza blew me away. You make a good point about how this situation turned out to be an adventure because you lived to tell about it. I love the metaphor of the fire and the difficult-to-breathe situation.

Beautifully done.

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you so much, Beth. My East Coast heart never tolerated the altitudes as well as it should have - thank you for noticing that!

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Moorea Maguire's avatar

I'm guessing this is a poem about your rich ex when you lived in SoCA. You were addicted to adrenaline rushes, but that was the day you decided to stop it for the sake of your kids?

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Patty Bee's avatar

Hi Moorea,

I was not the one addicted to the adrenaline - he was. I remember the realization that the hike could have ended very badly - and that this mattered to me, but not as much to him.

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Moorea Maguire's avatar

Ah, got it, thanks for correcting me. I'm glad you got out of there in one piece. Your writing is so vivid. Love it.

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Susan J Hilger's avatar

Beautiful storytelling

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you, Susan!

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Marty D. Snow's avatar

This is so good. Thank you, Patty.

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Patty Bee's avatar

Thank you very much!

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